Our story has evolved to a slightly different angle. Now, instead of having the alien blow up the door, we have him work out the door after humiliating himself by trying all different techniques to open the door (breath analysis/retina scan/fingerprint i.d). He accidently turns the door handle in desperation and finds a corridor. He walks down it and is worried when he sees ANOTHER set of doors, but is relieved when they open for him. It turns out to be an elevator. He stands there waiting for something to happen, but nothing does. It gets really awkward, and a long pause ensues before he notices the 'up' button. He presses it and breathes a sigh of relief as the elevator ascends, but is annoyed when it breaks down. The final straw is when he gets back into his spaceship, it fails to start and makes a sound like a Datsun Sunny on a cold morning.
I like the new ending because it has a more subtle humour to it than our previous, 'let's just explode the base', but I worry that it's not enough to get people laughing. I think one more joke in the corridor would be funny, to me it seems to easy to just have the doors open for him. I don't know though.
Kerrie and I redid the ending on the storyboards and got rid of the guards (which we have decided aren't necessary now that the explosion has been taken out).
Here is a picture of the old storyboard, anyway:
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